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Saturday, June 29, 2013

Milk Carton Murders 17

Last week Dave confronted his father about Samantha, one of the foster kids who stayed at his house, and how she was one of the three coffins that came out of the creek bank. Dave's dad indicates it is somehow his fault.  Dave asked why she was up in the attic. Well..... I have to leave you guessing on  that conversation. We're getting to the point where I have to be careful not to give too much away in the snippets. 

The conversation below is after the above one when Investigator Pepper Black comes to Dave's house to question his dad, Hal.  Hal blurted some stuff out which I won't tell you. This is immediately after that. 

(Stupid me missed the WWW cutoff, but it's still my FB Sunday Snippet below.)

“So you don’t think I killed those kids?” asked Hal.

“Now I didn’t say that; especially since you just planted the seed. You might very well be my killer. As you can see, I’m blunt too,” said Pepper. “I guess it’s going to depend on what you tell me or don’t tell me.”

“I didn’t kill anyone, Miss Black.”

“Well, you’re going to need to do better than that, Hal.”

“She’s a spunky one, David. I’d like that―if she wasn’t thinking of arresting me.”

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BLURB:
When three small coffins are unearthed near the Wiscoy Creek during a routine dredging operation, it’s the last thing DAVE ROBERTSON, of the Lamont Weekly Times, expected. Pinned to the skeleton’s clothing are pictures from milk cartons of missing girls.

Dave is stunned to find that one of the girls is Sally―a foster child his parents had cared for through the Friends of Foster Families (FFF) program. Cold case files reveal the girls disappeared over 20 years ago. Knowing his house was the last place he saw Sally alive, he can’t help but suspect his dad.

How can he write the biggest story of his career if his father turns out to be the killer? If the voice in his head would shut up and let him remember, he might figure it out before he loses his mind and his dad is charged with murder.

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19 comments:

  1. I wondered what Pepper would think if she had all of David's information.

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  2. She's figuring some of it out on her own already--he just doesn't know it. :)

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  3. I'm glad to know that, David is a little bit getting on my nerves because I can't see if he wants the truth or only to protect his father.

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  4. Nice teaser. I'd wondered that from the beginning. Was he really the killer? Or was he protecting the killer? Nicely done. Is this one out yet or is it still coming? I want to read the whole thing! :)

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  5. Eventually it will be out, one way or another. Beta #2 has it now.

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  6. AnonymousJune 30, 2013

    He "planted the seed"!!! What does that mean *shakes fist at 8 sentence limit*

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  7. I'm still waiting for a twist . . . though I'm afraid one more will break David!

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  8. This story has me SO hooked, can't wait to read it all at once. Enjoyed today's excerpt but as always it's too short LOL!

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  9. I CAN'T wait to read this!

    I like Hal's comment about her being a spunky one. He seems to be oblivious to what he's facing! But...is that part of his game, or he is as innocent as he claims?? Nicely done, Cindy! :-)

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  10. AnonymousJune 30, 2013

    Well, he certainly doesn't seem intimidated by the idea of being suspected of murder. Hmmm.

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  11. Writerlysam Hal planted the seed as to his guilt by what he said previous that I didn't show. Cause well, I don't want to tell everything in the snippets. :)

    Sarah W, sorry I don't mean to be a tease. Yes, there are lots of twists. Dave just had a big one, I just can't show it. Well, I could, but a snippet like that will spoil the story as a whole.

    Kate, Hal is counting on his son to change Pepper's mind about him.

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  12. Nice snippet. The old man is a matchmaker, isn't he? LOL!

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  13. Ohhh, is there an 8 sentence limit? I wondered why you posted such small pieces. I'm thinking of not reading for a week so I have more to read :D

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  14. So is there a point when you tell more than snippets?

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  15. Kristen, yes an 8 sentence snippet. I guess the Sunday thing is just to see if other people find your story interesting, to share, motivation, blog views, some people have books coming out so it's teasers for them.

    I'm editing this story now so I thought I'd share to see what people think... and its fun.

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  16. Great snippet. They all have been. I can't wait for this one to be available to read. I'm intrigued.

    Since it's still in the edit stages: I believe you need to add (do) in this sentence. :)
    “Well, you’re going to need to (do) better than that, Hal.”

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  17. The last line is awesome!

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  18. Arrived here via the Ultimate Blog Challenge. I'm finding your blog interesting, but a little confused. These are snippets from the book you're working on?

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  19. Karen, that is so funny. My mind put "do" in there every time I read it. All the more reason one should always use beta readers and if possible an editor. Thank you! So corrected. :)

    Yes Sushi, it is from my WIP that is in edits.

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