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Sunday, November 02, 2014

Milk Carton Murders 43

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. This is a view of Silver Lake, one of the settings in The Milk Carton Murders
SETUP:We are still in the county sheriff's office where Dave is looking at files and photos pulled from his attic kept from when his mother and father were foster parents to several children. Last week Inv. Pepper Black and Dave come across two group photos of the missing girls taken during a Friends of Foster Families picnic at a local farm, from when Dave was a kid. Dave is pointing some people out in the photographs to Pepper.

AND NOW THE SNIPPET: (Pepper speaks first)

“Now why, I wonder, is Lisa or Rachael even in this photograph?”

“I’m not following you.” Dave said.

“Rachael McKenzie would have been four in 1987, but she was abducted from Cuba, NY in 1986. Same thing for Lisa – why is she in this photograph? She would have been three in this photo, but she went missing from Albany, no where near here. Did you look up anything on microfilm for Samantha or Lisa?”

“I tried. I didn’t find anything,” Dave answered. 


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  1. The plot thickens week by week. Pepper is clever. Dave seems to be the weaker one. Tell us more.

  2. Oh, the limitations of 8 sentences!

    This line: "“Now why, I wonder, ..." sounds so natural! It just made the line pop while I read it.

    Nicely done! I can hardly wait to read this!

  3. I think he's going to have to look again! Nice exchange.

  4. Ahh, a very intriguing discovery, indeed! I haven't been to your blog in a while, Cindy, but I love the new look of it! Kudos to you! :)

  5. More twists, or are they red herrings? I love how you drop things in that could be really important but maybe aren't. You've nailed the mystery aspect of this story, and the characters are so engaging, and I just want to read the book :D :D

    Tiny suggestion: I think where you abbreviate NY should be spelled out. I normally don't see abbreviations for things like that in fiction. That sticks out to me as a writer but certainly takes nothing away from the impact of the excerpt.

    1. Thanks Marcia. I'll make sure I fix that. Can you tell it was a NaNo novel? :)

  6. Well that set of tidbits is certainly an addition to the mystery. Love this story. I'm really conflicted about Dave - good guy, bad guy, victim, or???? Another excellent excerpt!

  7. More mystery on top of a pile of questions. I'm so intrigued.

  8. I'm enjoying the way you're unveiling the layers of the mystery bit by bit. Great eight.

  9. I always leave your snippets with questions buzzing round my brain. Well done again.

  10. Oh no, what is going on? Where did Rachel and Lisa go? I've got to read more! So intriguing, great job!

  11. So, they appeared after they were kidnapped? Or before? Hmmm . . .

  12. Were either of the kidnapped girls on any milk cartons?

    1. Yes, in previous snippets it tells of the girls photos being on the milk cartons and those pinned to their remains.

  13. I only started a few weeks ago reading this story, but I'm really intrigued now. very well done.


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