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AND NOW THE SNIPPET: (Pepper speaks first)
“Now why, I wonder, is Lisa or Rachael even in this photograph?”
“I’m not following you.” Dave said.
“Rachael McKenzie would have been four in 1987, but she was abducted from Cuba, NY in 1986. Same thing for Lisa – why is she in this photograph? She would have been three in this photo, but she went missing from Albany, no where near here. Did you look up anything on microfilm for Samantha or Lisa?”
“I tried. I didn’t find anything,” Dave answered.
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The plot thickens week by week. Pepper is clever. Dave seems to be the weaker one. Tell us more.
ReplyDeleteOh, the limitations of 8 sentences!
ReplyDeleteThis line: "“Now why, I wonder, ..." sounds so natural! It just made the line pop while I read it.
Nicely done! I can hardly wait to read this!
Thanks you two. :)
ReplyDeleteI think he's going to have to look again! Nice exchange.
ReplyDeleteAhh, a very intriguing discovery, indeed! I haven't been to your blog in a while, Cindy, but I love the new look of it! Kudos to you! :)
ReplyDeleteMore twists, or are they red herrings? I love how you drop things in that could be really important but maybe aren't. You've nailed the mystery aspect of this story, and the characters are so engaging, and I just want to read the book :D :D
ReplyDeleteTiny suggestion: I think where you abbreviate NY should be spelled out. I normally don't see abbreviations for things like that in fiction. That sticks out to me as a writer but certainly takes nothing away from the impact of the excerpt.
Thanks Marcia. I'll make sure I fix that. Can you tell it was a NaNo novel? :)
DeleteWell that set of tidbits is certainly an addition to the mystery. Love this story. I'm really conflicted about Dave - good guy, bad guy, victim, or???? Another excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteMore mystery on top of a pile of questions. I'm so intrigued.
ReplyDeleteI'm enjoying the way you're unveiling the layers of the mystery bit by bit. Great eight.
ReplyDeleteI always leave your snippets with questions buzzing round my brain. Well done again.
ReplyDeleteOh no, what is going on? Where did Rachel and Lisa go? I've got to read more! So intriguing, great job!
ReplyDeleteSo, they appeared after they were kidnapped? Or before? Hmmm . . .
ReplyDeleteHummmm indeed. :)
DeleteWere either of the kidnapped girls on any milk cartons?
ReplyDeleteYes, in previous snippets it tells of the girls photos being on the milk cartons and those pinned to their remains.
DeleteVery crisp writing.
ReplyDeleteI only started a few weeks ago reading this story, but I'm really intrigued now. very well done.
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