This is a blog hop. The object is to write eight sentences from your writing, published or unpublished, for the other participants to critique (as well as anyone else who wants to comment of course). This is a snippet from my WIP, The Milk Carton Murders.
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| A book blurb for the Milk Carton Murders can be found on this page. |
Herbert Wilde squatted down alongside the CSI waiting for further instructions.
“Well this is it gentleman," said Pepper, “you ready?”
It was a question that didn’t require an answer.
Pepper lifted the coffin lid.
“Shit,” Dave said.
“I ditto that,” said Sheriff Nazzaro.
The first thing everyone noticed was the clipped section of another milk carton pinned to what seemed to be another female skeleton.
The piece of milk carton that Dave could clearly see read, MISSING April 8, 1990, from Albany, NY, Lisa Appleton.
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The link to the other Weekend Writing Warriors is here.
Ooh! That's very intriguing. Great snippet. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteHmm, wow does this raise all kinds of questions! Really enjoyed this excerpt, can't wait for more.
ReplyDeletethis makes you want to know more. Sounds like a serial killer is at work.
ReplyDeleteCreepy, mysterious, and fascinating. I like it!
ReplyDeleteNice--imaginative! I like it, too! :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet! I'm intrigued, I want to know more.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting! i'll be back for more...
ReplyDeleteWOW! I love this. Good tension, nice details, and a terrific build-up to a wicked end of the excerpt. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteOy my god! Fabulous! Completely grabbed me and I want to read more.
ReplyDeleteWhoa, that is one evil little snippet. The ending hits hard, and good. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks all. Still needs editing but I'll probably play along next week too. It's fun to see what others are working on.
ReplyDeleteYuck. But on the bright side that makes ID-ing the victims easier, unless the milk carton pieces don't match the victims, in which case they are dealing with a very, very sick mind.
ReplyDeleteIf relatives are alive (sounds like it) they could check identity with DNA.
ReplyDeleteYou are so right Sue. That comes later, along with interview folks in the foster program I made up. :)
ReplyDeleteVery dark snippet, which makes me LOVE it! Hurry up next Sunday!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
It seems they've been here before. That "shit" sounded like something they might be expecting but not wanting. The milk carton is an intriguing link. I wonder what clues it holds?
ReplyDeleteIt would be interesting if the killer ID'd his victims with the appropriate milk carton photo.
ReplyDeleteAnd even more interesting if not!
I really like this. Great concept with the milk carton connection, how chillingly ironic.
ReplyDeleteAnd the tension builds. And it brings about many questions. Can't wait to read more. Great job! :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks. My son was 4 when they started the milk carton campaign in the early 80s. It always spooked me. I'll have to post a short synopsis before next week's WWW.
ReplyDeleteCreepy find! Sounds like they have a serial killer on their hands–one who's playing a really long game. I hope they catch him/her.
ReplyDeleteLots of questions raised in these 8. Great extract. I want to know more...
ReplyDeleteI haven't thought about the milk carton campaign in a while. The snippet gave me chills.
ReplyDeleteCreepy, but it's supposed to be! You say just enough to let me see what's going on. Nice snippet.
ReplyDeleteYikes - it's like a gruesome X marks the spot: pinning the milk carton picture of the missing person to the victim. Intriguing!
ReplyDeletePS - love the template for your blog :)
Thanks all. I'm looking forward to posting more snippets. I really like this template too Drama Mama. I started a new blog for my history related stuff, but this template was so nice I decided to start using it again for my fiction writing.
ReplyDeleteAnother milk carton? Another skeleton? Hmmm...nice job building suspense.
ReplyDeleteI can feel the tension, like an extra character. Totally creepy. Well done.
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