2013 March 10
Weekend Writing Warriors is a blog hop. The
object is to write eight sentences from your writing, published or
unpublished, for the other participants to critique (as well as anyone
else who wants to comment of course). This is a snippet from my WIP, The Milk Carton Murders.
- See more at: http://historysleuth.blogspot.com/#sthash.KzbxXmen.dpuf
The Milk Carton Murders
(A brief synopsis of the story and previous excerpts can be found here.)
Some background.
This is from the perspective of the killer, who has a now old dog named Baxter.
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The mutt was just a puppy when it
first started, a stray himself--kids weren’t part
of the plan. Then one April day everything changed. The love of my life got
out of the car, child in tow, and casually came up the walk as if it was normal--as if the child was another Baxter found on the side of the road.
“Adorable, isn't she? You remember
her don’t you?”
“Yes, Samantha Briggs, she was
sent back home a few months ago so why is she here?”
“You mean Sally. Her name is
Sally now, isn’t it sweetie?”
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The link to the other Weekend Writing Warriors is here. This week we have over 80 participants! You're bound to find something to pique your interest.
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Interesting development in the story. Samantha's return sounds very unofficial. Leads me to ask all sorts of questions–is his wife involved in the murders as well? Why has she brought the girl back? Very intriguing snippet.
ReplyDeleteA lot going on in this snippet. So many unanswered questions.
ReplyDeleteSpooky snippet ... so many things can be going on!!!
ReplyDeleteOooh, I want to know what's going on.
ReplyDeleteThere is something fantastically creepy about this exchange. Well done.
ReplyDeleteOh why the name change. Interesting development. Gotta know more.
ReplyDeleteYou've caught my attention. I want to learn more!!!
ReplyDeleteSo much mystery here. Name change and why is she back? I can't wait to see what happens next. :-) Great job!
ReplyDeleteSo many questions and so many possibilities. Nice job! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis story is so spooky yet intriguing. another excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments everyone. I'm glad it's creepy. :)
ReplyDeleteUh oh! That name change doesn't sound like a good thing! Great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteA little weird and mysterious to say the least. Looking forward to what you have next!
ReplyDeleteEeep. Creepy, creepy, creepy. WHAT is going on?? Need to know more....!
ReplyDeleteThe creepy factor just amped up. Good post! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis is getting more mysterious by the minute.
ReplyDeleteThis snippet gave me goosebumps! Great job. Will most definitely be reading next Sunday!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Oh, Wow! So many possibilities for Very Bad Things! Excellent!
ReplyDeleteEh? Very creepy snippet, indeed. Lots of questions. Hope we get to learn more with the next snippet :)
ReplyDeleteIntriguing exchange which raises all kind of questions. More please!
ReplyDeleteI am totally hooked. Went back and read the synopsis and notes. Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteI got the shivers on that last line. Something very off happening here, to change a child's name like that.
ReplyDeleteI'm intrested to see what in the world is going on here. Makes me a little worried with changing the kids name. Totally have me hooked right now and want to learn more.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comments. I
ReplyDeletem still working my way through the list and trying not to lose my place. :)
Ewww, the love of his life is a child kidnapper. Terribly delicious snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteDue to knowing this is from the perspective of a killer, I'm chilled by the interactions with the puppy and girl. Very casual and very foreboding. Love it!
ReplyDeleteOh my, what is going on? I'll be back to find out!
ReplyDeleteThis doesn't bode well for the girl! Intriguing...
ReplyDeleteSoooo many questions. Absolutely intriguing!
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