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| Just some cows in the rural setting of the story---the county where I live. |
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“Jack,” Clayton began, still unsure of what to say next, “I’m going to have to ask you some questions, and I’m sorry about that, but you understand we have to try and figure out what happened, right?”“Yes, I understand,” Jack said, as he looked at his wife's blank expression.
“Alright then, so was Margie still working up at McCormick’s Boat Rental?”
“Yes, just the weekends this time of year, until tourist season starts beginning of May.” Jack faced Alice as he answered. “Isn’t that right honey?” His wife gave no indication that she heard the question.
“So she worked yesterday then, I take it, on Friday?”
“I believe she did, every Friday til 4 o’clock,” Jack said.
“No, she didn’t ...” said Alice, her voice barely audible.
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If you've liked my posts of The Milk Carton Murders, you should like this tale too. It was written to predate MCM and includes Sheriff Nazzaro and Pepper Black as well as other characters, from MCM.
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Hmm, sounds like Alice knows something. No wonder she isn't reacting normally.
ReplyDeleteGrief hiding something her husband isn't aware of. How sad. Wonderfully written. I'm so pleased to see you again.
ReplyDeleteWonderful scene. I cannot fathom being able to respond at all after the death--much less such a gruesome death--of your child. I think you portray this very well with Alice's remoteness. Then her words seem to explode on the page. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteUh oh, what does Alice know and why doesn't Jack know it too? Your mysteries are always so fascinating. Great snippet.
ReplyDeletevery interesting!
ReplyDeleteA revelation is about to burst on the scene, and it will change the direction of the investigation.
ReplyDeleteHmmm... Bombshell coming. :-)
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue is very natural, Cindy. :-) Your beats and tags are perfect.
What does Alice know. Intriguing snippet. And I want to know too. :)
ReplyDeleteI guess the daughter hid things from her father she didn't hide from her mother. The question is, what where her secrets?
ReplyDeleteExcellent cliffhanger! I will be back for more ;-)
ReplyDeleteHeart breaking as the nightmare unfolds. Deep breath after reading this brilliant piece of writing.
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