Pepper had some pretty damning evidence against Dave's dad last time about his work in the print shop and how the killer changed the milk carton layouts to add his victims. Just to keep the flow of the scene the last line last week was the voice in Dave's head which said, "Two points for Pepper, Davy boy. You better come up with something or poor, old Hal here will be spending his retirement in Attica."
Dave
didn’t like the way this was going. “Okay, two points for you, Pepper, but it seems
pretty farfetched don’t you think?”
“Not
really—maybe they were souvenirs for him,” said Pepper, “like some serial
killers keep something from their victims. This would be so much better. The milk cartons with their pictures would
be right in plain sight. He could look at them every day, in every store, and so
would everyone else. It would be very gratifying for him.”
“That’s
just plain sick!” said Hal.
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(This also serves as post #15 in the Ultimate Blog Challenge.)
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BLURB:
When
three small coffins are unearthed near the Wiscoy Creek during a
routine dredging operation, it’s the last thing DAVE ROBERTSON, of the Lamont Weekly Times, expected. Pinned to the skeleton’s clothing are pictures from milk cartons of missing girls.
Dave is stunned to find that one of the girls is Sally―a foster child his parents had cared for through the Friends of Foster Families (FFF) program. Cold case files reveal the girls disappeared over 20 years ago. Knowing his house was the last place he saw Sally alive, he can’t help but suspect his dad.
How can he write the biggest story of his career if his father turns out to be the killer? If the voice in his head would shut up and let him remember, he might figure it out before he loses his mind and his dad is charged with murder.
Full blurb and snippet recap here.
Dave is stunned to find that one of the girls is Sally―a foster child his parents had cared for through the Friends of Foster Families (FFF) program. Cold case files reveal the girls disappeared over 20 years ago. Knowing his house was the last place he saw Sally alive, he can’t help but suspect his dad.
How can he write the biggest story of his career if his father turns out to be the killer? If the voice in his head would shut up and let him remember, he might figure it out before he loses his mind and his dad is charged with murder.
Full blurb and snippet recap here.
Things are looking really bad for Hal! I'm rooting for him to be innocent. Dave's discomfort is so obvious and well portrayed.
ReplyDeleteNot to mention that it would also make him think that they were still alive somewhere and that he didn't kill them.
ReplyDeleteI would say at this point, Dave is the killer and his mother covert it up for him without telling his dad.
Sounds like Pepper's on to something. Really great scene!
ReplyDeleteI'm with Linda -- poor Davy's probably going to have to choose between Hal spending his retirement in Attica or going there himself.
ReplyDeleteAnother nice one!
~Charley
I never thought of the milk cartons being souvenirs . . . That's diabolically clever! And creepy!
ReplyDeleteAnd when is this coming out again?
Love your ideas, Pepper has it all worked out - or so it seems!
ReplyDeleteMy first time checking out your snippets, and this has got me fully intrigued. Nicely done. I like the milk carton souvenir concept...very creepy!
ReplyDeleteI admit you have me hooked. Pepper seems to think she has all the answers. Can't wait to see where the investigation takes her.
ReplyDeleteMan, Cindy, you have a creepy way of thinking that works perfectly for this story! :-D
ReplyDeleteThis is a great turning point scene: is Pepper right, is she half-right, is this a red herring? Great excerpt.
The whole thing with the milk carton labeling is fantastic. I'm totally hooked by this story and can't wait to learn more. Always a new twist! Another excellent excerpt.
ReplyDeleteI'll be back later to comment on everyone's blogs (if I haven't already)and from our list. I'm on vacation in Austin and we're off to the Alamo!
ReplyDeleteThe plot thickens and I'm getting more nervous for Dave. ;) Nicely done, Cindy.
ReplyDeleteI'm right with Siobhan, my stomach's in knots. Well done. :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Hal's last statement. Well done with the rising suspense. Great 8.
ReplyDeletegreat 8! I actually shivered at the idea of the killer looking at the milk carton pictures every day as tokens of his kills...
ReplyDeleteGod job of racheting up the tension.
ReplyDeleteThe plot thickens. Ha! Davey boy is squirming, and Pepper is hitting hard with her investigation. Another great 8, Cindy! :-)
ReplyDeleteIt's just getting worse and worse for him, isn't it? Fantastic snippet. Now I'm really wondering if he did it, and if not, then who?
ReplyDeleteGreat scene, and interesting insight into the mind of the killer.
ReplyDelete~Skye
Sick and creepy indeed... And very clever.
ReplyDeleteHow's he going to get out of this one?
I don't think it's sick. I think it's brilliant.
ReplyDeleteSick, indeed. But logical, no doubt! At least to the madman...
ReplyDeleteI don't think I will ever look at a carton of milk the same way again...
ReplyDeleteLove that premise! Great idea with the milk carton pictures. Enjoyed your 8!
ReplyDeleteAnother great cliffhanger there.
ReplyDeleteHal and Dave. Weren't they the characters in 2001: Space Odyssey? Hal:"Why are you touching the milk cartons, Dave? Don't you trust me?" Sick, I'll say! The suspense is killing me Cynthia!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments this week everyone.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet and I love this story, and the theory of putting the victims on the milk cartons!
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